Tuesday, March 10, 2009

She dreamed!



He came closer
She skipped a beat

He held her wrist
She clenched her fist

He glared at her
She closed her eyes

He kissed her neck
She mesmerized the moment

He stepped back
She opened her eyes

He vanished
She dreamed

9 comments:

Ubaid said...

ok this was mesmerizing

I LIKE !!

AJ said...

:| .. ok where did that come from? :)

gone! said...

@Ubi Thank you!

@Ahmer :) It came from ... my mind...or maybe heart...during the Forensics lecture :D

AJ said...

@komal: hehe i think heart's guilty. :p, some what mind is her partner in crime.. :P

gone! said...

Na! My heart isn't guilty for anything and brain is stuffed with so much formulas, equations, definitions, theories and blah bleh bluh that there is no space for guilt! :D

AJ said...

lol :)

Dutta said...

It was all going very well till the line "She mesmerized the moment" .. It broke the flow.

Cardinal mistake of poetry, if there is a flow don't break it..

Other wise it was Great ... :)

gone! said...

@Som Thanks for the advice. I will consider it next time :)

Crazy Girl said...

i like it!